Art

Just because the beginning captured my attention, I, as a reader, feel no obligation to continue the piece if it begins to bore me. Feelings are very nice, yes, everyone has feelings and emotions to talk about - but it is only a bit of constructive criticism in saying that by cutting down your piece to a palatable length, you will capture that many more people's attention, and that many more people will read it through to the end. As opposed, to, say, reading the first paragraph, predicting how the entire piece will go, and barely skimming over the last part. Many people, when they're angry, they'll start ranting, spout off a million extraneous details concerning the event - and how many people are listening to them? Maybe it's interesting to the person ranting, maybe it's their entire world at that moment- but no one is obligated to listen because it's that person's passion, or because it contains that person's feelings. They'd stick around because the rant (some objective comparison needed here) is honestly interesting, or they'll zone out and maybe console with a few empty words. Obviously the person who wrote this meant it to be seen by others, so refining their writing with a twice-over and some smart self-editing won't ruin their "passionate voice", or anything like that.